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Work In Progress…

Today’s opening lines:

“How did you get here?” Susie asked. “I mean, I know you’ll have flown over, but what’s it in aid of?”

“Do you not realise that we came just to see you sweetheart?” said her mother. “We came because we wanted and needed to see you for ourselves. We’ve been worried about the whole…” Susie’s mother hesitated before she said his name, “…the whole Lux situation.”

Susie’s father continued the story. “You see, we’ve had him on our trail in Australia too?”

“Really?” Susie felt a shiver right from the top of her head down to her toes. She looked at her father’s stern face. “When was that?”

“Before he came for you my darling.”

“What happened out in Australia?”

Her mother took up the rest of the story. “We rented a lovely house on Fenwick Street in Geelong. It was large because it used to be a corner tuck shop that sold sandwiches and ice, that kind of thing. Apparently it serviced the whole of the Ford factory in Geelong and was very lucrative. Of course, when we rented the property it had been turned into a house, but it had such potential for people like us, with the store-rooms and cellar down below, the entrance to which your handyman brother here managed to conceal very effectively indeed.”

Thomas blushed at the praise. “I had help from Dad though.”

“Anyway,” Kate continued, “one glorious day we were all about to go down to the beach when your father spotted someone lurking across the road. He got out his binoculars and even though Lux was heavily disguised, there was no question it was him. “

Written by Antonia Bloom (ABloom Writing Services)

March 1, 2013 at 1:52 pm

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